This is my 9-year-old Granddaughters' version:
A famiLy of micE lived on a medium sized ship. It was the middle of winteR and almost everybody was shivering. One morning, it was busier than usual. Instead of fishermen coming with their nets, lots more people came with woolly coats and backpacks. Even an army lifer was there to make sure all was safe. The mice were surprised that even the loner from around the corner was trying to stowaway. Why were there so many people? Was it important? The mice pondered. The family were made up of a Mother and Father, a Daughter, a Son and a Baby mouse. Their names were Michelle, Adam, Kitty, Copper and Donny. They lived on the lower part of the ship. There was a bump as they set sail and an hour later, an ocean liner honked by. Kitty was told to hold baby Donny while Copper and her parents went to investigate. She was a liker of babies.
This is my version:
The foLk on thE stReet couldn't work out what it was about the new resident, Henry. Some thought he was just a loner. More sinister rumours were that he was an escaped lifer. But Mrs Peters wouldn't have any of these. She made an effort to befriend Henry. After a couple of months they were good friends. Mrs Peters' reputation was now that of a liker and she became very popular. Those with a lower reputation of Henry were gradually raising their thoughts about Henry. When it was time for the street party, they were all out there in good spirits with each other. Folk were keen to get to know Henry and learn about his fascinating past career. He could tell them many tales about his 20 years of being the captain of an ocean liner.
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