This is my 9-year-old Granddaughter's version:
Fluffy wAs a mountain rabbit and had sEttled in a pleasant burrow in a medium sized mountain. He lived with a sensible family comprising of his 2 younger twin brother and sister, an older sister, and his mother and father. Fluffy had his own remarks on his family, like he thought his father looked a bit beaky since he had a very large pointy nose. Fluffy's grandma lived in the mountain next door and she was full of wisdom and kept pointing out old adages to mother because she is always spending lots of money. Just yesterday, she reminded mum of a wise old adage. "A penny saved is a penny earned", she would say. Bonnie, my older sister is looking very peaky today since she had a headache last night. Today seems really boring because right now, I'm just watching dad snead the rose bush while he made his arms chafe heavily. I decided to go and find something to eat and had to heave myself from the comfy position on the wall in exchange for the taste of a warm welcoming snack.
This is my version:
Although AlEx had been teased at school because of his beaky nose, he had not let it dampen his enthusiasm for learning, becoming a confident well-rounded young man. He'd grown up in Norfolk, and, for a change, had a great walking holiday in the Scottish Highlands one summer where the landscape was so peaky compared to his flat Norfolk. One of the things that he had picked up in his youth were various sayings. One in particular, the adage 'a rolling stone gathers no moss', was a particular favourite of his. On his walking he was on the lookout to see if he could find any rolling stones and whether they gathered any moss. He soon realised that this was never going to happen whilst he was watching! Mind you, it didn't stop him taking home a snead of smooth rock which had no moss on it! At one point on his walk he slipped and slid down a short slope. He got up and carried on, but his leg started hurting. Checking where the pain was coming from, he found that there were chafe marks from the fall. The pain didn't improve and by the time he'd got back to his car, he was done in and he had to heave himself back into the car and attend to his wound before driving back to his lodgings.
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